Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
Oh my days. This week, I somehow managed to combine materials from three chapters into one this week! It was mainly because I’ve killed some darlings in previous chapters and had to keep taking out more that didn’t apply to the story anymore. I did get to revisit a favorite passage of mine, just because the scene came super clear in my mind so I was able to write what I wanted.
In this passage, Ilsi overhears a Yildirim commander talking with another high-ranking gent about their progress in searching for Ilsi and her friends. Ilsi rightfully questions their abilities as soldiers after they talk, search the area, and move on without finding the girls.
“Now gather everyone, and we’ll leave immediately. This search is getting more and more absurd,” the commander announced, muttering the last sentiment more to himself.
The sound of marching feet soon died away. Ilsi bit her lip as she shook her head furiously.
Those men didn’t come anywhere near us. They are either dimwits and don’t know how to properly find two young girls, or they knew how close they were hiding and talked loud enough for them to hear.
Is it a trap? Was all of that a show for us?
Ilsi’s gets the feeling during this passage that these soldiers think that looking for Ilsi and her new friend, Gilly, is a fool’s errand. Orders are orders, right? However, Ilsi has to act fast to get a step or two ahead of these soldiers.
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6 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 26”
Hopefully it’s the former, not the latter! Great snippet! 🙂
Could be a trap, didn’t sound very militaristic so could have been just to fool the girls. Interesting snippet!
Good question – are the soldiers lazy or cunning?
Right? I’ve never written an army into my writing before, so hopefully they don’t come out as wimps or just easy-to-beat thugs from Power Rangers. ;P
Congratulations on killing off your characters and deleting so much of your work. (Only other writers realize what progress this can be!)
I think Ilsi is asking all the right questions. I wonder the same. 🙂 Good 8, Wit!