Happy Valentines’ Day, everyone! Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
This snippet directly follows Gilly’s sudden reveal. Althod wastes no time in showing Gilly who’s boss, which causes quite a fuss.
As if the guards were the extension of Althod’s reflexes, the soldiers sprang to action to dispose of Gilly. They were stopped by the fake palace attendants, guards and servants. Some surprised the Yildirim soldiers by leaping upon them and fighting them; others further confused their adversaries by transforming into beasts in mid-sprint. It was nearly evenly matched, except Althod’s had the upper hand with soldiers using their lighting shocks to subdue their enemies.
Gilly kept herself heavily guarded with her hands; they were aflame and she had already scorched a ring of fire around her person. She leapt through her own fire as though it were nothing and fought oncoming foes, burning them if they came to close.
To further aid Gilly’s mission, a handful of skilled Elven soldiers suddenly burst in the room and began taking care of the guards already in the room and the others who were rushing to Althod’s aid.
But Gilly wasn’t here to waste such a valuable diversion. The larger Animen were properly warned and shrunk away in time as Gilly sang another spell—a quick burst of flames erupted on Althod’s dominant spell hand, the hand with Ilsi’s rings.
“You could’ve just dropped the linen incident,” Gilly called shrewdly.
It’s hard to imagine an old gent and a preteen at each other’s throats, but that’s fantasy for you. Until then, check out other snippets here. You can also learn more about the novel, Destiny Seeker, here. Don’t forget to comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well! Compliments and constructive insight are equally welcome.
8 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 41”
Very visual and fast paced. LOVE the last line!
Great action in this scene! And that last line was just *mic drop* 🙂
Good excerpt here! I get the sense that everything’s happening almost all at once yet it’s easy to follow what’s going on. Kudos on that!
Could I make one suggestion? I think if you drop “suddenly” when you mention the Elven warriors arriving the sentence will flow a bit better. Anyway, it’s really an unnecessary word. It’s clear that the warriors’ arrival is sudden.
Sure hope you pick up right from here next week!
Lots of good action here–though it seems perhaps that the superior magic will win, regardless of the fighters themselves. I forgot to sign up this week, but my snippet is here.
Nothing like a good fight with the guards
Great action, that I have to admit that last line made me laugh. Perfectly timed!
Tons of great action here. I would have loved to see what beasts the men turned into mid-sprint.
I have a few images like that within this fight and in others; it’s pretty intense and cool! The concept of Animen just wouldn’t seem complete without it. 🙂