Hey, everyone! Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
This is probably the last segment of this confrontation between Gilly and Althod. Below, learn who wins this battle—and how.
Gilly walked through her own fire unharmed, but still wounded from Yildirim attacks. With a hand aflame, she grabbed the stump that used to be Althod’s hand and yanked it fiercely and barbarically, severing whatever was still connecting it to his wrist with her long knife. Althod kept screaming and swearing, the veins in his neck and forehead threatening to burst open. With blood all over the special gloves, she took Ilsi’s rings from the sickly fingers and held them in her hand.
She informed everyone connected to her as an Animen that she was done and they should escape now during the confusing. Those with wings fluttered madly out the window, cawing from pain but also from triumph. Those who were dependent upon legs scurried out the door, some in the form of heavily injured humans. Gilly tried to help the others who remained but someone stopped her.
“Go!” one of the twin bears roared. “You must go and not look back or it will be all for nothing!”
Eesh! A bit brutal, but they made their message clear! Until then, check out other snippets here. You can also learn more about the novel, Destiny Seeker, here. Don’t forget to comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well! Compliments and constructive insight are equally welcome.
3 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 42”
Well, sometimes brutality is the clearest way to get your message across! It’s easy to picture what’s happening here which I like, though I do wonder how Gilly felt about finally getting those rings.
Could I make a suggestion? In this sentence “Althod kept screaming and swearing, the veins in his neck and forehead threatening to burst open and break through his skin” you’ve got three “ands” – it might help tighten things to drop either “burst open” or “break through his skin.” Those phrases pretty much say the same thing and I don’t think anything is gained by using both.
I’m enjoying these excerpts 🙂
Lots of gore in this one. Seems as though the good guy won, though. [Typo: confusing should be confusion.]
Oh yeah, the message was clear all right. That was deliciously intense. Thanks for sharing!