Hey, everyone! Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
I realized I made Snippet 45 without actually putting my link on the official website, so check out the snippet to catch up, since I’m providing snippets from a totally different novel.
To bring you up to speed to this snippet, Lotte tries desperately to get a clingy boyfriend out of her life for good. To her surprise, she discovers that he’s somewhat other-worldly. He creates a storm around her and accuses her and her family of things she doesn’t understand. She wakes up the next morning cold and alone in the park and goes home to sleep. She wakes up to part two of Chris’ actions.
“What the crap, guys!” I gasped. “What are you doing here?”
“We heard you talking in your sleep,” Alex said, his tone serious. He and my other brothers stifled groans as if someone sucker punched them in the gut. “Peder woke up because he could hear you and he was scared. We woke up because we found these.”
He pointed to welts on his neck and the skin under his chin. I gasped because all of my brothers had those little welts scattered all over their skin like rashes.
“What happened to you guys?” I asked. I wish I hadn’t because Peder shrieked in his eleven-year-shriek and both of his hands went to his forehead.
Words will never hurt me, huh? Check out other snippets here. You can also learn more about the novel, Speechless, here. Don’t forget to comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well! Compliments and constructive insight are equally welcome.
Very interesting snippet Whitney! I love the eleven-year-old hysteria. As the mother of an eleven-year -old, I can picture it perfectly! Well done!
Glad that came across so clearly. Thanks for reading!
This does not sound good- I can’t imagine what this guy is up to. I can totally picture the eleven-year-old shriek. 🙂
Probably the worst sound I can think of. I hate the sound of kids reacting to pain, especially my younger brothers (who were a big influence on these characters).
Oh no, something bad’s going on! Great tension here. It’s hard to wait for the next excerpt now!
Thanks for reading! I hope next week’s snippet will be worth the wait. 🙂
Aw, poor kids. Sounds like she needs to pick her boyfriends a bit more carefully!
Her parents are having similar thoughts, that’s for sure!
Welts all over their bodies? Yikes! Something strange is going on, for sure. Great snippet!
Yup! Next week that’ll hopefully come to light. 😉 Thanks for reading!
Did the boyfriend do that? If so, he’s dangerous.
Spooky and unsettling. I wonder what consequences the welts will have.
Hope the kids are okay. Welts on all of them would be seriously scary.
Yikes. Wonder what’s going on, and how those welts got there.