Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
I enjoyed sharing last week’s snippet involving Lotte’s family and the beginning of their game plan to help the whole family. This snippet starts right after last week’s. The last line from last week’s snippet read as “How will we know if they will work?” Ben asked.
“Where do you even find nettles, anyway?” Thomas asked.
“Google it!” Alex suggested.
“On it,” Ben mumbled, already navigating his phone with his thumb. “Well, lucky for us, it grows in the U.S., and it says here that nettles grows in fields and in the forest, especially by streams.”
“Do they even grow during the winter?” Jared asked.
“We friggin live in Oregon,” Alex interjected, “let’s go out and find out for sure!”
“We need to be more serious about this, guys,” Sam said, “because if she fails, we could be . . . turned into swans just like in the story.”
“Swans? Why couldn’t she turn us into something more manly like dinosaurs?”
“Dinosaurs are extinct, doofus,” Ben muttered, but chuckled.
Oh man. I wrote this a two years ago and I revised it this weekend. I’m crossing my fingers that some of this slang will be understandable and pertinent by the time this book is published! I want to keep what I have because I feel like using very modern stuff (bae, dope, twerk) will sound too cheesy or forced.
Until next time, check out other snippets here. You can also learn more about the novel, Speechless, here. Don’t forget to comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well! Compliments and constructive insight are equally welcome.
4 comments on “Weekend Writing Warriors: Snippet 54”
The dialogue seems very realistic to me and I don’t notice anything amiss with the word choices/slang. Keep up the good work!
I appreciate the feedback! <3
Great dialogue! It seemed very realistic. I liked it!
Thanks, Amy! PS I just finished Storm Born this past week! It was great! <3