Time for another Weekend Writing Warriors snippet. Every Sunday, I join a bunch of writers through a blog hop and post an 8-10 sentence snippet of my current project. You can click on the link to see what everyone else is up to.
Last week, Christoph decided to pay Lotte a quick visit while she was out running errands—much to Lotte’s dismay. After months of trying to cope with her new circumstances, she can’t escape him without further hurting her brothers. In last week’s snippet she realized that he may be able to read her mind and tries to explain that she doesn’t know why he would do this to her, and after looking like a stuck-up d-bag, he’s finally letting some walls down.
“You told me that I put thoughts into your mind,” he insisted, “so I thought that meant you were blocking my power.”
I rolled my eyes because he sounded like he realized he had just made a big mistake. I half-hoped that he would maybe sympathize with me and lift the curse if he was able to—or at least tell me what the hell a magic-nixer is.
“Don’t flatter yourself,” he muttered, and I could finally tell that he did have some kind of access to my thoughts. “I’ve come across more convincing nixers in my day. You’re just using your womanly wiles against me—it’s what you’ve done this whole time.”
Me—I’m the vixen? I immediately dropped my shopping basket and stormed off; the clerk gave us a wary look as Christoph followed close behind me.
“How dare you walk away from me,” he barked as we left the store and I was power walking towards my car. “I came for justice.”
Insert scoff or swear word here, right?
Also, does anyone have any suggestions on villain names for a teenager? I don’t think Christoph will cut it, with Frozen still a thing. I sort of threw in a name while I wrote most of this during last year’s NaNoWriMo event.
I gave Lotte’s family relatively Scandinavian names because they have Danish heritage that dually pays homage to H. C. Andersen as well as my own. Should I pick something American/normal, stick with something old (to show that he’s really foreign to her), or something else entirely?
Until next time, check out other snippets here. You can also learn more about the novel, Speechless, here. Don’t forget to comment below if you’ve got a snippet to share as well! Compliments and constructive insight are equally welcome.
Interesting snippet – I was a bit confused by whether she does or doesn’t have the power to nix, but I’m very interested in what happens next!
Yeah, I was thinking this snippet would talk about it, so the stuff I said after snippet 57 may have been false advertisement. It definitely gets fleshed out as time goes on.
Fun snippet. He might have access to her mind but he certainly doesn’t seem to understand her. BTW, the website Behind the Names is a fun and informative time-suck where you can search names by heritage and find out what they mean, if anything.
I have definitely heard of this site before–so thanks for the reminder! It’s so interesting to read about the history and meaning behind all the names. <3
Uh, Christophe, justice is in aisle four, between the artichokes and rutabagas.
As for a name, may I suggest something with a decidedly Old Testament sound?
That could be an interesting name category to explore…there are definitely a lot to choose from. You didn’t mean “Lucifer,” right? 😉
Thoren, Niles, Ludvig, Lothar, Latham, Jarel, Gunnar…. Nice snippet! Nothing like a good drama in the market.
Thanks for the suggestions! I like Jarel and Gunnar. 🙂 Thanks for reading!
Good snippet! I like where you left off and want to know more. When I can’t think of a name, I use Nameberry. MILLIONS of names on there from dozens of cultures. 😀
Oh wow, that’s cool! For a second there I thought you meant that you call your characters “Nameberry.” haha! I love sites like that, so I’ll definitely check it out. 🙂